WINOL 19th November Wednesday Debrief with Laura Trant (BBC South)

Really slick, easy to understand, engaging, didn’t drag, informative

Strong paced heads, fun gambling shots appropriate, good choice of actuality here

Rephrase link into Stephens package, be truthful, be aware of this

STEPHEN: Strong PTC, straight away drawn into story, needed some NATSOT or something, the pauses were slightly unnatural, Shirley towers context was good, neighbour good grab, could we have seen interviewee sooner? Very strong

JOB CUTS: Liked very top of piece, zoom in on pics was good, kind of arty but appropriate, good interview, good clip, more from police statement their POV could have added to this package

Should’ve had link to Bracken’s graphic; it didn’t naturally flow

BRACKEN: Really clear graphics, selected stats well, presentation was really strong, acknowledge the graphic if it’s there even green screen, hold paper flat

BROOKE: would’ve worked well on South Today, first line great to pictures, PTC excellent, case study really good really open and frank, actuality strong clip to hypnotherapist, fantastic graphics, very strong human interest piece

WOMEN BISHOPS: really important subject, link was religious/statement speak, would you say that to your friends? Link simpler. Priest was great, dream sound bite really. In titles? Vox pops added to this?

HORSES: loved the shots, strong first line, write really well, brave good decision for PTC, comfortable, see the people who were speaking for a bit longer, loved last line, ‘cracking stuff’, can really write to pics it’s a skill and you’ve got it

OOV delay: timing issues

DOGS: Good to break dogs and horses, strong but PTC static, film interviewee doing their job? Looks more relaxed

SPORT: good presentation, good pacy film, Twitter pics good, statement from web good, PTC slightly dark. Language used for football commentary great, give it a bit of oomph

LEONARD COHEN: good but why no more music? Move on stills good, simple piece but well told and good to tell

DANCING MAN: brilliant piece, talked about and watch again, great to see the photographs but not just flicking through album? lovely piece

Honestly impressed, standard high, imagination, creativity, would’ve definitely worked on South today

Zeena has a lovely voice and tone, use your charm, be light hearted, great presentation

One of the best programmes ever – Ian

Real structure to pieces – beginning, middle, end

Brooke highlight
Stephen access and interviews
Eyelines good this week
Programme mix was really nice
Mics nearer people

Suss out on the day how PTC should be – static or walking?

Be prepared to fight your own battles, stick to your guns and work with your colleagues. Have confidence in yourself, know what your strong points are

WINOL Analysis “Horse owners hit by ‘devastating’ disease”

My opening shot grabs the attention of the viewer and there is rich NATSOT. I thought of the most obvious association for a horse that was the *clip clop* walking sound and aimed at getting this before I was on location. I knew exactly what my package was going to look like before I left the newsroom. I think it worked well but possibly could have had the horse coming towards the camera and not away for the first shot.

I tried an experimental PTC with getting on a horse, which I have never done before. I would have preferred if I’d been able to improve the script content wise in the PTC – this may have made it look more comfortable and less nervous.

I felt that my voice was quite confident and the presentation was clear, I was confident in writing script to pictures. I have taken the time to practice voicing and emphasis in my own time and I think you can see this improvement.

I really liked the structure of my package in the end after playing around with the VT. I tried two different edits and decided on this one because of the stronger NATSOT at the beginning. I really liked the sequences and close up shots in the piece with good use of ATMOS underlaying this. It was  a good idea to have the sycamore seed picture overlaying the introduction to Sharon to fully identify what I was talking about in the report.

Sharon Bayliss gave a great grab and Malcolm was a good speaker that simplified the warning and what it meant essentially. These were strong interviewees – it was a shame that they were slightly soft and Malcolm’s overlay was not as strong as it could have been, his eyeline was also slightly wrong. Next time I need better lenses from the loan counter! Both were outside with good sound and good colours.

I had a good range of shots on location from the stables – a nice variety of close and wide shots, the lighting helped with this package. The sound mix across the report was good and I had good, rich NATSOT throughout.

 

 

 

Year Three: Third Package “Horse owners hit by ‘devastating’ disease”

 

Hampshire horse owners are on high alert as the number of  infected horses has risen yet again this week.

Sycamore helicopter seeds contain harmful toxins linked to atypical myopathy, a disease that causes heart and lung failure, wasting of muscle and digestive problems.

Owners have been warned by equine vets of potential death if the seeds are swallowed, with just a 20% chance of the horse surviving.

Burley Manor Riding Stables owner, Sharon Bayliss, lost two horses to the disease last year. She said:”It’s devastating,” adding: “I won’t turn any other horses out there because I would then feel very much responsible for that.”

Stable Close Equine Vet Malcolm Morley said: “It’s definitely a risk,” and: “it’s really vital that they understand it.”

Scientists at Belgian university Université de Liège are researching the disease and urging horse owners to record all cases.

COMMENT: Pinpointing an MP’s agenda

An MP’s role is to represent their constituents in Parliament: to bring local issues to national attention, to bring a small fish to a big pond.

It seems that this principle is being overshadowed by egotistical names representing a brand and instead making national issues a local problem.

Had Eastleigh locals even thought about slaughterhouse CCTV? Was it really top of their agenda affecting daily lives? I think not.

Politics has lost its grip on being for the people. Now I’m not going to go all Russell Brand and stir up a revolution as he is about as close to the average person as I am to a politician.

The New Forest experienced one of the worst animal crashes in 20 years this week and no MP has spoken out to support a campaign for safer roads. Three donkeys were killed in the accident involving two cars one of which did not stop.

This is a local issue that needs national attention.

The New Forest has been a National Park since March 2005 with its unique tradition of commoning where essentially the wildlife owns the New Forest; they define the area.

Crashes like the donkey one stated above, compromise the whole ethos of the national park. A campaign that needs a boost in profile but is being almost ignored by national powers.

These animals are there to enjoy nature, be shown and for general pleasure, only for their lives to come to an abrupt halt by man-made ignorance.

As much as I agree slaughterhouses should be regulated and adhere to rules, the animals are bred for a completely different reason and are inevitably going to have their lives brought to an unnatural end.

But animal accidents are easier to fix than slaughterhouse regulations. Fix the closer to home issues first and then the national and even international problems.